ext_14411 ([identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_medley_/) wrote in [personal profile] donutsweeper 2007-12-06 04:05 am (UTC)

I love the emotion in this, the way Jack doesn't know what he's feeling and the way it's tied in with the weather, the rain letting him finally cry. I like the stranger, too, despite what he did, because the sense is that he did it to avoid something that would've been worse. I also really like that you've left it open, who the stranger is and who Jack's mourning.

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