Babble on POVs

[donutsweeper]

Just a question, and I'm not sure of the correct terminology here, but when reading (or writing), do you prefer a tight 3rd person POV  (where all events are seen and interpreted through one character's eyes) or switching between people's 3rd person POV with obvious page breaks or markers to show the new POV?

For example- my entire Charming the Pants off the Pashahads SGA/Jack crossover is told from Sheppard's POV, there is no scene where we see what Jack thinks about falling into the Pegasus Galaxy.  At points there are Sheppard's interpretation of Jack's actions (he notices a hedged answer, an avoided question, but doesn't know why Jack  answered that way).  If it had been written with switching POV's there could be the scene from Shep's perspective, noticing what he notices and wondering about it, followed by the same scene retold from Jack's, where he explained the reasons for saying what he did.  There also could have been scenes left out from the story the way I told it- I never did explain how Jack managed to get his hands on the Pashahads (because Sheppard wasn't there and wouldn't know).

I've been noticing more and more of the latter showing up in stories lately.  Presuming this babble actually makes sense to anyone, do you notice the difference between those types of POV styles and do you like one more than the other?

Comments

[tejas.livejournal.com]

Descriptive terms should only be used when they're directly relevant to the moment. Tony thinking of Gibbs as "the older man" could make perfect sense if he was thinking about Gibbs' bad knee and how Gibbs was getting older and so on.

It's a very easy trap to fall into, though, especially in slash where pronoun confusion reigns supreme. :-)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

oh, in a situation like that it would make a lot of sense. Too often it's just unnecessary though.

[tejas.livejournal.com]

Agreed. fandom_grammar had a great post on this. (And I hope I got the comm name right. I'm feeling too lazy to look it up, but it's in my profile.)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

Oh, I've seen that comm! A few of the posts are a little to specific for me, but others have been fascinating.

[tejas.livejournal.com]

They've done a few on broader, more advanced topics that are terrific. It's useful to browse through the archive and see what's there. Sometimes you stumble on stuff you've forgotten you have trouble with until you actually see it. :-)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

it taught me the difference between awhile and a while.

I just reread the epithet one. I wish more people took it to heart.

[tejas.livejournal.com]

It's one of the reasons I spread the word, far and wide. :-) It's a good comm to watch. They also take suggestions if there's something you're curious about or, in the case of 90% of my suggestions, stuff I'm sick to death of seeing in fic. :-)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

It's weird- I never learned grammar or punctuation rules in school. Seriously, read Shakespeare? Sure! Learn to diagram a sentence? Nope. Between comms like that one and very patient betas I've learned so much! But, I guess I want to improve and I sometimes wonder if a lot of writers out there just don't.

[tejas.livejournal.com]

I'm an instinctive grammarian, too. Learned it from reading and from the fact that my mother would correct us if we didn't speak properly. I've learned far more about the nuts and bolts of grammar since I started writing and paying attention to crit than I ever did in school.

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

I wish I had more of a background with it. I've taken some books out of the library- "Eats, Shoots, and Leaves" and similar ones.

I do wonder if basic stuff like this is getting shoved aside at school, that they aren't bothering to teach it as much as they should

[chatona.livejournal.com]

In those cases, I would probably find it easier to accept the descriptive term, but honestly? I still wouldn't like it. It's probably a personal preference?

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

I think it can be used- Tony jokingly saying 'out of breath, old man?" or something like that.

Overall though, best avoided, especially when not in dialogue

[chatona.livejournal.com]

I have nothing at all against using it in ic-dialogue. I have a problem with seeing it used in the actual descriptive 3rd person text, I guess ^^;

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

I understand completely. It's hard to do *right*

[chatona.livejournal.com]

Yup. Oh, well. If it's not used too much I can deal with it, anyhow :D

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

tejas reminded me of this post (http://community.livejournal.com/fandom_grammar/1062.html) on epithets which really gives some good examples of when NOT to use them and when they can work, but you still shouldn't and when they are good

[chatona.livejournal.com]

That is a really interesting post! ... I should have unpacked my stuff before starting to read stuff, now it'll never get unpacked *facepalms*

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

the internet is a terrible lure...

[tejas.livejournal.com]

Unpacking is overrated. Much better to just grab the stuff as you need it.

Signed... Enablers R'Us - we enable, so you have someone to blame. :-)

[tejas.livejournal.com]

Yep. Used sparingly for specific, pertinent emphasis works fine.

That generally comes down to about once every 20k words. :-)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

as often as that? :)

[tejas.livejournal.com]

LOL!

"Tony watched Archer trip again. At least he wasn't bagging evidence this time. There was a pool on how much longer it would be before his team leader just shot the bumbling idiot and put him out of all their miseries."

*That's* when it works. :-)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

now there's an example of it working

[tejas.livejournal.com]

Emphasizing a particular trait when that trait is the point of the passage works.

But that's the only time.

[chatona.livejournal.com]

I read the article you linked to. I guess that summarises it all pretty well :D