Taking What's Mine

[donutsweeper]

Title: Taking What's Mine
Word Count: 100
Pairing/Rating/Warning:  The Master/Jack, rated R, spoilers for "Last of the Time Lords"
Summary:  The Master, Jack, and a lesson during the year that never was.

He is naked.  His muscles ripple, straining against the chains.  I slide my hand over those lovely pectorals and then trace those tight abs.  As my fingers slip down further he raises his head.  His eyes betray him, pleading silently, begging me to stop.  But he never makes a sound.

I can’t help but laugh as I slip behind him to take what is mine, again and again, thrusting to the beat of the drums until he passes out from the pain.

Oh well.  There’s always tomorrow.  He'll enjoy it eventually.  We’ll have such fun then.

Bonne nuit, mon Capitaine.

Comments

[fandom-me.livejournal.com]

Eeeek. This is really good and really dark and I like it. Well 'like', because it's just not comfortable, but that's a good thing, here.

Quick bit of a note - you've got past tense at the very start but you've switched to present in the third sentence.

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

That's exactly what I was shooting for, glad it worked for you.

Thanks for the catch on my tense shift, I fixed it.

[fandom-me.livejournal.com]

Oh, it so so so worked. Beautiful job with packing a lot of emotion and squirm in there.

I do that kind of thing all the time, as reading the comments on any of my fic will attest >.<.

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

Nice to know I'm in such good company then!

[fandom-me.livejournal.com]

I have a dream, that someday I will post something and no one will find errors. I figure another year or ten >.< *clings to you*

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

Add in Captain Jack feeding us donuts while fanning us and I think we'd be in heaven then.

[unfeathered]

I couldn't find any errors in your drabble this morning.

I looked really hard, too!

*g*

[fandom-me.livejournal.com]

HA! *marks it on the freaking calendar and has a cupcake to celebrate*

[unfeathered]

There have been others with no errors too. If you look back through your comments you will find them. They're the ones where I haven't mentioned any *g*

Like most of us, you're fine on the short things. It's just the longer things, where you've played around with the text, that tend to have errors :-)

[fandom-me.livejournal.com]

Well, I'm just about to send out a longer thing for a first look over, and then a second look over and do you want it, too, or are you up to your nose with other stuff - and either one's fine, I just dont' want to nag at you.

[unfeathered]

I want it I want it! Don't leave me out!!!

I have no more rehearsals now for a whole week, so I should have the next few evenings free. And I've given myself a day off writing and I'm getting on with Donut's thing instead, so I should be available tomorrow evening and there onwards.

Send it over whenever :-)

[fandom-me.livejournal.com]

OK! I'll get it through Medley early reading and Karen doing edits and then pop it off to you to catch the rest!

[unfeathered]

Cool :-)

[unfeathered]

Oooh, very hot. And I get what everyone meant when they said my last chapter was hot but uncomfortable, because this is the same, only I didn't write it.

Lovely menacing Master voice you've got going there.

More please? :-)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

Actually this drabble was part of a "the five times.." fic for the year that never was that I'd written but decided was far too dark to post. Maybe I'll dig out the others, polish them up and post one or two.

[unfeathered]

Oooh, yes, please, I don't mind dark. It's interesting. And so very different from my real life :-)

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

err... okay, they're REALLY dark though. Poor Jack I feel a little bad for what I put him through sometimes. I'll post another as drabble and then a longer one later.

[unfeathered]

Poor Jack I feel a little bad for what I put him through sometimes.

Don't worry, you're by no means the only one! *g*

I've lost count of the times I've started a fic review with 'poor Jack'!

He does suffer so beautifully, though - what can one do but make him suffer some more!

[donutsweeper.livejournal.com]

I posted the whole thing, I hope people don't think it's too dark.
http://donutsweeper.livejournal.com/8261.html